CK Lynn

Wow, this was really great! There's only two little (nitpicky) things that I saw. One was the "he shouldn't have been born" phrase. Its a good line and is in ...

What an strange poem (in a good way).I love the sort of cavalier, smart-aleck voice its told in, as well as the imagery. That said, in the second verse, it ...

This was a nice poem, but there were some things in it you could improve. First of all, I'll has an apostrophe in it. "ill" means sick, and that doesn't ...

I like this a lot. The lyrical language is a very nice addition to the story, and the way you can't tell if its taking place now or in the ...

Wow, this is really good. My favorite verse was the third one. it just had this sense of muted pain, and it was wonderful. I like the ideas of music ...

This was quite an intersting poem. There aren't many on this subject, its very refreshing. I agree with JordanEmert, though, I prefer because instead of 'cause. Also, I think this ...

I really like this. I agree with Evi, though, that I have mixed opinions about the unique structure and circular language. I love the way it sounds and feels when ...

This is really great. Its very unusual, and a nice breath of clean air from all the starcrossed-lovers type stuff. That said, there were a few things that threw me ...

This was a very nice poem. I liked the imagery at the end. This piece flowed very well--the language was consistent in its tone and the lines consistent in their ...

Very interesting. I like the metaphorical journey idea, and the way you talked about it as being through a desert. "Solemn shadow" was the best phrase of the poem. This ...

I like the first line, it sounds very nice. The rest of it just doesn't fit together very well, especially the second line, which sounds very forced. I don't think ...

"Icicles like scissors snipping off dwarf finger." That line was great. There needs to be some more of that kind of imagery in the poem. It's very, very good, but ...

Oh, I've wanted to do a sestina for so long but they never turn out. this is great. The only parts I had probl;ems with was the discription of a ...

I can't say I get the title. When I clicked on this I was thinking it was going to be something...well, I'm not really sure whast I was expecting but ...

I liked this piece. THere are a couple things I would change though: 1) Take out some of the questions. Don't delete them, just make it so they're sentances and ...